5 Senses:
Sentences: He would always sit outside staring into the sunset hearing the salty flavoured waves clashing against the rocks and remember it all.
From a distance you see a blonde headed teenage girl walking up the beach with the crunchy, golden beige sand in between her tootsies the same little girl James was with the day of the rade, she was walking with that B Violet
“ alrighty then, today James you are going to be a new man, you’re starting high school tomorrow, don’t think you will get picked on because you are home school from the age 6-15, that shouldn’t matter because your glowing teenage skin, ocean blue eyes, soft brownish-black curly hair, Zac Efron bod, and your kind personality should send all the girls coming towards you”
She smelt like flowers and strawberries, her favourite flower was not violet but a Rose believe it or not she disliked them
Braking it down:
Hear~ Hearing the salty flavoured waves clashing against the rocks
See~ From a distance you see a blonde headed teenage girl
Smell~ She smelt like flowers and strawberries.
Taste~ Salty flavoured waves
Feel~ Crunchy, golden beige sand in between her tootsies
Deleting words:
Sentences: "alrighty then, today James you are going to be a new man, you’re starting high school tomorrow, don’t think you will get picked on because you are home school from the age 6-15, that shouldn’t matter because your glowing teenage skin, ocean blue eyes, soft brownish-black curly hair, Zac Efron bod, and your kind personality should send all the girls coming towards you”
Braking it down:
"James you are going to be a new man this year; you’re starting high school tomorrow, you won't get picked on because you were homeschooled from the ages of 6-15, it shouldn’t matter because your glowing teenage skin, Zac Efron bod, jaw-dropping face, and your charismatic personality should send all the girls chasing after you”
Inserting words:
Sentences: James picked up Violet by her head and immediately dropped her, he was such in shock that he dropped Violet by her head and stood up to greet his childhood best friend/crush.
Braking it down:
As James rushed to pick up Violet by her "damaged" head he immediately dropped her in shock of seeing his childhood best friend/ crush looking like a gorgeous model right in front of his eyes.
Replacing words:
Sentences:
It’s now 2022 and James is now 17, a surfer, a Gucci rich lord because of Instagram, he happily helps the homeless, he doesn’t have a thing with anyone, and he is also ending his last year in high school.
Braking it down:
It's now 2022, James is a 17-year-old bachelor surfer and an Instagram influencer which happily helps the homeless on weekends, and finishing his last year in Summer Hill High.
Onomatapaya and Allritaion:
Sentences:
his family was attacked by hunters was thinking at this moment.
he happily helps the homeless
Braking it down:
His family was invaded by hunters
( I'm keeping that alteration)
Similes, Metaphors, and Persifcation:
Sentences:
she was a cheerleader and as flexible as rubber
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